The Clouds Reflect the Beauty and Health of the Nature
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It seems from the sky everything looks perfect. The ocean is quiet, the sunset reflects its beauty under the water and the clouds drawn themselves on the ocean. The nature shows its power and splendor. The clouds are part of this nature. They have inspired a lot of artists to create their painting. We can find clouds in different pictures, may be they are not the main theme but they are part of it. Also, when children are drawing, it is very common to find some clouds in their draws. On the other hand, from a scientific point of view they are part of a process called condensation that is important for the world and specially, for human beings because it helps us to get water from rivers, ocean, etc. Recently, clouds do not tend to look as healthy as they used to. Sometimes, they seem polluted and one of the reasons is because our unconscious work activities, so it is important to keep in mind that some of our human actions are destroying this nature. We should try not to pollute in order to have a beautiful nature and we can see it reflected in the clouds.
Awesome writing! I've noticed just a few details:
1- The ocean is quiet, the sunset reflects its beauty under the water and the clouds DRAW themselves on the ocean.
---> You could change that word for the past participle
2-- Too many isolated ideas
3. We should try NOT to pollute.
Great writing! It´s incredible you can write many deep things about the nature with a simple picture. In my opinion, it has sad and dark colors and do not inspire me to write good thing at all so nice job....
Thank you Gaby, I will keep in mind your advices.
Dear Victor,
Advice does not take plural, besides the product of kids activity with colors and/or pencil is drawing.
I agree with Gabriella about the isolated ideas, but I liked the picture you drew from my photo.
Good.