Sentence Reducing Strategies
Publicado por Pedro Pablo Escalante | | Posted On miércoles, 9 de febrero de 2011 at 17:08
Exercise 1
This summary must be reduced to 115 words. Watch your professor using the sentence reducing strategies to omit unnecessary words and avoid redundant expressions.
Schenker states that in the future, houses will be networked making people's life easier and comfortable. The electronic devices will be connected to internet and will have special chips to control different activities like housework, communications, shopping, bill or people's social life. The disadvantages of having a networked home do not seem to be significant. People will just have to pay some dollars for the extra chips, the connection to internet and the security measures to protect the system against cyber pirating. People will not afford the maintenance because the services will repair themselves. The money will not mean much considering all the benefits of having a smart house. (109)
Exercise 2
Monica has sent her summary to the evaluative committee of the magazine "tesol quarterly" to be considered for future publication. However it was sent back because the word limit was 115. Help Monica to reduce it and fullfil the demands of the audience to be accepted.
This study examined 1,600 comments written on 110 first drafts of essays by 47 university ESL advanced students, considering the pragmatic goals for and the linguistic features of each comment. Drafts of essays were examined to observe the influence of the first draft commentary on the student’s revision and assess whether that were made in response to the teacher’s feedback improved the essays. A significant proportion of the comments led to student revision, and there were particular types and forms of commentary that were more helpful than others. The final results are suggestive of important implications for L2 writing instruction and for future studies on a vital but neglected topic. (109)
Dear Victor,
The reduction was ok, it could be better if you omit "the" in electronic devices will be...; different in different activities like
Good.